Comic 733 - The Lost Spell of Baron Fontainebleu, Page 15

13th Mar 2018, 11:00 PM in The Lost Spell of Baron Fontainebleu
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Author Notes:

Adam C. 13th Mar 2018, 11:00 PM edit delete
Adam C.
Ughhh... Yeah, this is very clearly the point past where I'd realized I'd gone too far. When Alex showed up it was established within Blues via exposition who he was, and while the Dorothy thing was never explained in this comic it's the basic premise of Wright As Rayne so it's not too much to expect the readers to know it. With the outright avalanche of WaR characters coming in we haven't had time to establish who any of them are or get to know them within the context of Blues, so unless you outright read the other comic this all feels kinda weird. With the Witching Hour, that group in the first panel, we've officially crossed the line into stuff that hasn't even been established in that comic either.

You can kinda tell that me and Martin were so excited about thinking who all was gonna be after this treasure and how many cameoes we could stick in we didn't factor in how much of it made sense, and it feels like there's so much going on right now that it's kinda become meaningless. We've met Kadaram before but we don't know the names of the two people she's rolling with or the fact that they work for Eighth Sin, or how they know Sareena and Misty. So even if you DO read Wright As Rayne it doesn't have any impact to seeing them.

Nng. I've had a really annoying day so kinda why these comments are coming out so bad. I still think it kinda has a funny aspect of amping up the insanity, but I was disappointed when I realized how many balls I had in the air with this chapter and that the only way to make it work was to play it for laughs. Ana and Andy are pretty obviously voicing my own frustration with how this got really crazy really quickly, to the point that even I as the author kinda don't know what's going on anymore.

Feh. This page still has some fun stuff in it. Like we mentioned earlier, Ana is my favorite of the BP girls to work with here and enjoyed having her be the one to snap and ask what the hell was going on. Plus we've been trying to build up the idea of Kadaram as this mysterious, alien entity with this vast, bizarre past, so made sense for her and Jake to know each other. And... I kinda like the gag of Jake quoting Bob Dylan. It's weirdly fitting.

Martin also helped out a lot on writing this one, and a lot of the page has his input. Originally Sareena was supposed to be confronting the Witching Hour and trying to stand her ground, but he suggested she be a bit intimidated by them. Likewise he not only suggested Nine Eyes' having that big explosive entrance but Sareena reacting by being annoyed. Even the bold cry Nine Eyes makes in coming in was his idea, though I picked what he was specifically saying myself.

Admittedly maybe I shouldn't've gone with a Mortal Kombat reference but I couldn't help myself.
Martin F. 13th Mar 2018, 11:18 PM edit delete
Martin F.
I kind of love that my most immediate thought on opening the page to comment is for some reason, "I really need to change that taskbar icon, that's super outdated." Dunno why only now.

In either case, yeah, this page is pretty busy and kind of drawing attention to all of these aspects drawing together. I think it works, but it kind of does feel like it's coming up on time for less talking, more fighting. Maybe the tipping point will be the next page?

Incidentally, yeah, from the word go I wanted Nine Eyes to make some dramatic entrance only for Sareena and Misty to be unimpressed, given it's kind of been a thing with Nine Eyes that he's been constantly retooling himself as the comic's gone - I kind of see that as a deliberate choice on his part, basically constantly trying to come off as scarier and Sareena isn't biting.

Though maybe she should be given their last run-in with him ended with him just cleanly walking away after a small scuffle that neither side really had won and he's presently wearing a clump of her and Misty's hair acquired previously. But Sareena's nothing if not confident.

Comments:

Wolfintina 13th Mar 2018, 11:52 PM edit delete reply
The chaos levels just broke the stratosphere with this page and it's still going to get worse, Jake's sure met a lot of unusual people and wonder where Gwendolyn is.
Adam C. 16th Mar 2018, 10:50 PM edit delete reply
Adam C.
Heh. Kinda neat you noted that one. ^^ She'll be along later.